Merry Christmas Miraculous Reddit! Short Story: Jack Frost

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It's a little late, but here's a little story I whipped up quickly to end the year on a happy and positive note. Hopefully you all enjoy. See you in 2023!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/14MmkRQlj1URXZD5x4NMAISRvBhpNBaj-_NjbHjkRSdU/edit?usp=sharing

Posted Dec 31, 2022, 10:24 PM UTC · edited

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Source-TrustMeBro1:Ladynoir: Ladynoir•3 yr. ago

Best Parts:

Nino smiled. "Well, if they want us to open them early, then I won't say no."

He's speaking the truth

Kagami Shook her head. "She did lose the Miraculous. So that brings her winning percentage down. I factored in a 4% margin of error. Plus or minus."

When did kagami become the mathematician, i thought that was max's job

Rena Rouge leapt on his back and shoved her Flute into his mouth

what...

"Maybe Santa isn't so much a man with a beard but a rabbit."

This sounds so weird, but its so wholesome at the same time.

ValonscOP•3 yr. ago

Thanks for reading.

Yeah, now that you say that it does sound like max. I was trying to lean into her more methodical tone and that math stuff sounds more maxish. It was a funny line from a movie that popped into my head, but it wasn't good to use here. I'd definitely change it if I had more time on it. Also, I thought kagami would be the easiest voice to right, but I feel like I had the most trouble with her. I should have re watched some of her scenes to make it better.

About the rabbit. Yeah, that is awkward and I wasn't really happy with that. I wanted a more direct comparison, but I couldn't think of one so this is what it ended up as and it's not very strong.

Oh yeah the awkward rena rouge thing lol. I kind of sped up here because the story was getting long and so I skimped on the details (I totally didn't even describe Jack frost at all lol) and this was something I couldn't get across poetically. I'm not a fan of that line because it's dumb and should have been changed. I procrastinated on this story and was like ehh I don't know if I want to do it, but then at the last minute I was like this idea is in my head I just want to get it out. But by then there was no time to do it justice. Maybe I'll come back around to it for next christmas and do some revisions to smooth everything. It's more of a 1.5 draft rather than my best work.

But anyway thanks for reading and hopefully you enjoyed it. I'm proud of the idea of bunnix handing out christmas gifts. I do think that is a pretty rocking idea lol. Thanks for the feedback. it definitely helps for making tweak and doing other things.