[2439] Part 1/2 of Chapter 2 - Chaiwala in the Iron District

Helllloooo, I'm back with a revision!

This is the first part of chapter 2 of my WIP (a three-POV, YA Fantasy). Chapter 1 is with an entirely different character so its not super relevant for crits of this piece.

Y'know how sometimes when you revise it starts to feel like its somehow getting worse? That's where I'm at rn. Debating possibly scrapping this and rewriting from scratch. Would love to hear any and all thoughts!