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keterpele•

lightning bolt "S" is a well known concept. logo of kiss and nazi's SS mark are some famous examples. in your execution, you separate one element in two parts, but gap between is wider than parts of element and that creates a proximity issue. they look like two separate elements, rather than parts of one.

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TheColdNeutralOP•

I understand the point you’re making. However my reason for the objects being as far as they are is because their respective end points line up with their respective start points.

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BOH_Ninja•

I don't see it. Most folks won't see that connection even with the explanation.

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vi_code•

Love the clean look. How do you make those grids though ? Do you just arbitrarily draw lines and connect the shapes in between them or start with the shapes first ?

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rlewis2019•

need to push yourself further. lose all the superfluous slides until you have nailed the assignment. not seeing a lightning bolt or S from the mark so that slide is a stretch.

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ScaredChef1891•

It looks nice but means what? It’s so vague so minimalist it lacks any meaning it’s not even creating abstract letters. The gradients are nice but still it’s just 2 cut angled squares.

Something can be added to make this more personal. This is like a 5 minute job here there is way more work that needs to go into this.

Also it just doesn’t look enough like and “s” to work add a center line to make it look like an s at least

You could even connect them and use some gradient overlay effects. This should be like first 5 minutes of a design. Has potential but it’s so vague it could be turned into anything.

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Joseph_HTMP•

It’s minimal. Too minimal. The connection between the original idea and the logo is lost. Also the S = ⚡️ idea has troubling historical associations.

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