[1987] No Bad Days

Hey all! This story is a non-fiction piece that I had to cut down pretty severely to try to make a 2k word max. Wondering if it works (i.e. is it impactful, thoughts about the "revelation" mid-story, and themes explored) in this shortened version - or hell, if there's more to chop away. Also happy for any and all critique.

[Story] (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1i9ijIakvDZZI5UsJEv5oqxCi62rql6zOgW0EVEnemqs/edit?usp=sharing)

[Critique - 2891] (https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1097o48/2891_draugma_skeu_prologue/j59cf50/)