[2617] Fish Upon The Sky - Chapter 2

Good day to all!
So here’s the second chapter of my practice novel, genre: romcom.
A summary of what happens in the first chapter: Aaron, an anti-social nerd, falls in love at first sight with a guy who shares an umbrella with him on Valentine’s Day in his first year. He’s been anti-social after a bullying incident that happened back in school. The second chapter starts around an year after Aaron met that guy.

Some questions I’d love to have addressed:

1. I ended up having a bit too many scene changes. Does it work fine or did it get tiring or something?
2. Does Aaron come across as a bit too aggressive for just a jealous geek?

Thanks a lot for taking your time to read this. All sorts of thoughts and opinions are welcome.

Here’s the Chapter 2

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