[1177] The heir to the light

Ok, so this is my work in progress. More work, than progress, but hey it's something. English is my second language, and I am not a writer. Had this story brewing in my head for almost a decade, so I have EVERYTHING planned out. All that's left is to write. This is the first chapter and far from the first draft. I have been struggling a lot with whether to put the start (before the time skip) as a prologue or not. In the end, I decided to just separate it with three asterisks and tried to give the reader an early indication of the time skip, so tell me if that works or if it's confusing.

The story starts with MC who wants to see the world, but since she was born in the village, that guards the mountain pass against shadows, she is not allowed to leave. She misses her chance to go on a patrol mission due to an accident, but then disaster strikes and she is forced to travel to the capital to figure out the evil plot and uncover long-forgotten history in order to save the world from darkness.

Looking for any and all critique. Most importantly I want to know if you enjoyed reading it and would keep on reading, or if you had to force yourself past the first few paragraphs.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/11AYCBpN02Dzho6Rs8cExezSU_ZbXuY1ly8pMd-TBUOU/edit?usp=sharing

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My critique 1365 words, which I hope mods will approve. https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/10t2ya3/comment/j7h5435/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3