[1363] Gonna Have Some Fun Tonight (Ch. 3) [NSFW]

Hello everyone,

I have posted previously in this subreddit and need a bit of help tightening up this third chapter. Overall this is a fairly short transitional type chapter describing an event for my main character.

This novel is a sci-fi horror so the tone I'm aiming for is one of overwhelmed desperation against a far superior force. The opening two chapters describe the situation and the appearance of an alien anomaly which my main character is tasked to respond to. He is a member of the Israeli Defence Force.

In this specific chapter I know I open the first few paragraphs with a "tell" style exposition to really try and skip to the action as I am aiming for a page-turner. I've been working hard on the "show" part of my writing, but sometimes find it nearly impossible not to "tell" a little to accelerate the story and keep a pace that isn't dry and boring.

I think what I'm looking for most here is that this works as a transitional chapter. The whole idea of, "All plans fail on first contact with the enemy."

Here is the link to the google doc with comments allowed: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nWCZHC_vpOoQVTEbgmLwac_sJY-Snnb4ssy3vfRfGlY/edit?usp=sharing

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