[1852] Crazy Abuse WIP (Chap 1)

Crazy Abuse is a modern psychological mystery thriller about a Alice, a 21-year-old independent entrepreneur, experiencing her first episodes in an undiagnosed psychotics disorder. It is loosely based on a true story. My desire is to disorient the reader as much as the character is disoriented by her disorder (and it's suspicious treatments), leaving the audience just as paranoid about Alice's reality, disorder, family, doctors, employees, customers and friends as she is. Neither knowing what is really happening and what is a hallucination.

One of the main purposes of the story is to give people a vivid realistic first hand experience with mental illness. So they can empathize with people in the mental health system and better understand why some of the neurodivergent lose trust in their doctors and medications, and would rather be homeless instead of complying with treatment.

Here is the first chapter, please be as succinct and brutal as you desire, I appreciate all feedback and criticism:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1f9ughO61osSpuUB9EJ8AELVDTQoK6YEdM-lzhBSduvE/edit

Critiques:

[3568] Antiwerps Island Part 1 & Part 2.

[1508] Antwerp's Island (end of chap 1)