Your my No 1 cause you ain’t no 10 everybody wants the 8 9 but can’t get ten why don’t we look and add this up, why can’t you see this don’t add up I don’t want a perfect 10 get back too, 0 and start again,
Your the one in a Perfect
10
Posted Apr 3, 2023, 6:28 PM UTC
Awww... this is really cute. I like the way you play with numbers here. Even though I don't love math, this piece really adds up! lol. The only thing I might suggest is maybe some line breaks so it looks like a poem as much as it sounds like a poem right now. But overall, brilliant piece full of romance and whimsy!
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