[1586] Snowy Nights in Spring

First time posting here, so apologies in advance for any mistakes!

Here are my critiques, which I hope are within the 3 month limit:

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I posted Snowy Nights in Spring to r/nosleep and it wasn't popular. I suspect not a lot of people read it because of the title. Most stories there are titled something like, I pushed grandma off a cliff, and now she's haunting me! But maybe it just wasn't a good story?

I'd like to write an improved version, for fun and practice, and to share with a friend. I already rewrote it once, so why not a third time? So, I want feedback on what needs improvement. :)

Some issues I plan to improve are the lack of names, specific locations, and specific dates, as well as add more detail to the climax of the story. I also want to write a more ominous ending, but I need feedback on what it's lacking.

I opted not to use specific names because, to be honest, I was afraid of making mistakes. The story takes place in Yugoslavia, but I may need to change that to a colder climate. It takes place in April 1941, when Germany invaded. But I can change the date if necessary.

Anyways, I am open to any criticism or feedback! Thank you in advance!

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