[1102] The Old Steam Ship

This is the beginning of a murder mystery in an alternative world -- none of the characters here are suspects. I’m building up to that as I think about how to make expansions. I hope the first page or so here is a good hook for moving into the meat of what I want to write. Thank you for critiquing!

[1102] The Old Steam Ship (the working title for now) https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qjb7VHeZqEgRGyoPLrU3KL7ujWuBJs_WMfvJ_A7YZzo/edit?usp=sharing

My Critique [1115] https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/12i9t6k/1115_out_of_the_blue/