[2139] The Wind Farmer's Daughter

Hi All!

I love this group, and I've already learned so much from reading other's work, critiques, and having my own worked ripped to shreds! I hope I can get some critiques on my first chapter of a MG light fantasy novel I am currently writing. I know its probably not people's a favorite genre here, but I'll take any critique I can get.

The Wind Farmer's Daughter

Within your feedback I'd love to hear your thoughts on these points:

• Does this read easily, or did you find yourself caught on weird phrasing.
• Is the world building too light?
• How did you feel when you read this?
• Is the dialogue between the characters confusing?
• Did I introduce too many characters?
• Is this something —if you were the target audience —you would want to continue reading?
• And last, I would especially like comments or critiques on how I can improve my prose.

Thank you so much!

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