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Cinncinnbuns

Mother Dearest (but not really) *see commented pic for poem inspo

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Mother dearest

But not really . . .

Can’t be me.

Must please mom.

Why? Why can’t I get her voice out of my head? Why does she have such a hold?

I need to be me. I want to be me. I want to be supported … to be me — not a fake version she has concocted.

Release.

I need out of the choke hold she has put me in.

Breathe.

I will be ok once I undue the trauma that has been done.

Whether she wants me to

Or not.

5.13.23

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/13gt63n/my_mother/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=1&utm_term=1

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/13flxnj/and_i_stay_up_again/jk2s2e7/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=ioscss&utm_content=1&utm_term=1&context=3

Posted May 14, 2023, 3:19 AM UTC

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wayman-stewart•

I can tell this is something you really needed to write and get off your chest. And I hope it was therapeutic or healing for you, especially around this time of year. I really like the subject matter. I would just suggest to work on your formatting some. You put line breaks in certain places that didn’t really need it and vice versa. That can impact the way people process your work.

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thenewcandide•

This feels like an exasperated letting go

Something you needed to get off as soon as possible and the urgency is so palpable that it over goes any need for rhyme and imparts a rhythm by itself.

The meaning is obvious and at some point I feel like all of us have felt too overshadowed by another arching figure in our families

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RatQueen_x•

Very powerful poem. Great work! This spoke a lot to me and I appreciate your ability to put conflicting feelings into words

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