Troops
Trudging through the mud with our hunched backs,
We march and march toward a vast, open field.
Our ears are assaulted by the blaring sound of a screams
When our idol steps out, picks up a mic, and grins.
Posted May 26, 2023, 7:23 PM UTC
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That last line 🤯 describing the being of crossfire that way caused such a chilling effect, I love short poems that packs a punch!
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I love the comparison between Army troops heading into battle with that of a band getting onto a stage, for so short a poem that while not having strong rhythm it surly makes up for it with imagery! The image that came into my mind when I was reading this was so vivid, that it kinda freaked me out! But all in all I love it! Poems never have to be long to be good.