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lemons-squared

Im not getting my security deposit back

My apartment has she her pronouns
In the same way that russia does
And I gilded her
Made romanov ostentation out of her
I got her a couch
A fancy, footed, falling apart and un fucking comfortable couch to make her a fancy home
I loved her, (and the couch)
And she was in the same breath unlovable
Every feature I praised was a patch i made in the fucking drywall.
I loved the bathroom even as it was a post war rotted nightmare
I polished those tiles till they shined
I know theres only rot behind
I LOVED HER IN WAYS THE LANDLORD NEVER WILL

And were breaking up
Im taking a train from moskow
And pulling into probably south boston

You rarely forget your first
And I wont lie
She was a bear

Posted May 28, 2023, 3:16 PM UTC

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poetic___justiceExpert•

This piece is simply sublime! What a joy. The second I finished it, I wanted to read it again.

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83kghungBeginner•

What a great poem!! I love how it does justice to the feelings that surround renting a home. I really enjoyed reading this and would love to see how it looks on paper with line breaks!!

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Competitive-Grape-11Beginner•

Lovely poem. I read it 3 times.

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personalfaeBeginner•

your personification <333

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Short-Shine-2620Beginner•

Sounds gr8

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Glittering-Sweet-948Beginner•

Love it. I feel queer baited by your apartment

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lemons-squaredOPIntermediate•

I def feel queerbaited by my apartment!!!

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maygreentreeBeginner•

Oh my! This was a captivating read! I love the parallels drawn between loving something that you can never be yours. Loving something you know is awful, but you love it just the same.

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Better_In_TuneBeginner•

love this

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juheyeeBeginner•

this is so real lol

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Feeling_Sky_7775Beginner•

I polished those tiles till they shined

I know theres only rot behind

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Boy this statement can be used pretty universally- haha

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lemons-squaredOPIntermediate•

Im so thankful for all the lovely feedback! Im glad im not alone in such complex feelings towards my apartment

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Geronimo7686Beginner•

Huge fan! “I loved her in ways the landlord never will”. Simply cannot decided on a favorite line

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Ok-Cookie2925Beginner•

A creative, rule defying poem.

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Bridge_MinimumBeginner•

I love this poem so much!! The way you compare your apartment to a beloved home country and a past lover is great. I love how casual the poem feels while having these metaphors that feel very well fleshed out and explored.

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