[327] The Ancestor

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lame ass working title and very small snippet as it's all I have written atm, please be very rough. Only questions are these:

• Does it hook?

• Does the language/narrative style work? Was trying to emulate Borges a bit, specifically The Secret Miracle, but my prose is the least refined part of my writing (imo) so I'm not sure if it works in quite the same way (or at all).

• ^(Edit: ^For ^context, ^this ^isn't ^supposed ^to ^be ^a ^fictionalized ^research ^paper. ^More ^of ^an ^overview ^of ^historical ^events ^that ^happens ^to ^mention ^research ^papers. ^This ^bullet ^point ^ended ^up ^being ^super ^misleading.) If you know anything about genetics/research paper etiquette, do you have any tips for believability lol? No idea what I would even put into Google if I were to try to make it more accurate.

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