[1406] Mostly Dead Ch 1

Hey, so, this is a trial beginning. This is the original second chapter of the novel, but other readers said the first chapter doesn't reach its point until the end, and that I should consider starting from chapter 2. So I'm trying it out now. This is only part of the chapter. The whole thing is 4k.

TW: a graphic depiction of murder near the end, and a bad word or two

Story

Mainly concerned is if I need to add more information? Do things happen too quickly, moving too fast? I've tried to add some emotions in the beginning to flesh out the character a bit, but it's not my forte. Does it hit?

Do you want to know what happens or is everything too cluttered and confusing? Let me know. I have ten million different beginnings for this story and it's killing me trying to find one that most of the readers like.

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