[1372] Draugma Skeu Ch3

You don't need to read the first two chapters to read this. It introduces a new character, so it functions on its own. That said, I'm not trying quite so hard to hook the reader at this stage.

Questions:

In its original incarnation, this chapter was a set of isolated scenes. Previous feedback said it read as too fragmented. I've tried to tie them together more closely here. Does it still seem too jerky?

There's a bit of expository prose at the start. I like it. Not everyone does. I've tried to make it readable and interesting. What do you think?

Style-wise, I'm aiming for something slightly fancier than the standard clear glass style, without going overboard on descriptions. How well am I hitting that?

Most importantly, where does it drag? Where does it get confusing because of a lack of information?

The story: Chapter 3

Reviews: [2043]

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