[1515] Jessa Remembers Everything

Hi all,

I posted an earlier draft of this last year on an old account, and this is redraft - the biggest feedback was tense so I've gone through and made this a clear past tense first person POV and made some other big changes.

I don't really know how to describe the premise, but it's about a college girl's reflections on another girl to whom she used to be very close and their toxic dynamic.

Story is here - you can comment

Any thoughts are helpful.

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