[2468] Draugma Skeu Chapter One

Here's an updated version of the first chapter. If you've made comments on the last version, thanks for the help.

This chapter is meant to come after a prologue, so the reader will have already encountered Rose. Still, I would like it to stand on its own as the introduction to the main plot.

Standard questions apply:

Where does it drag or feel boring?
Is the information load too heavy or too light? Is any part of it confusing because you're not being told enough, or tiresome because you're being told too much?

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The critique: [4200]

The story: Chapter One

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