[1401] Reclamation Chapter 1

This is a fantasy story I am writing and would like to receive critique for.

It has been critiqued before, so I would like to know what can be better as it stands right now?

Is this interesting enough to keep you reading, or would you put it back.

Let me know what you all think, I feel like it has improved pretty well.

Thank you!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ij2acdfDnIcrCZOr4VPhyVEX4qh8bGbCKu1xRkdIn-Q/edit

my critique:

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