[2626] Needles of Light

Hi All, This is chapter 3 in a novel. So, obviously there are things that happened before this and things that will happen after.
In my opinion all feedback is good feedback. I don't mind harsh critiques. If you think this chapter sucks, don't be afraid to tell me. You won't hurt my feelings. Harsh critiques help me grow the most. Thanks in advance.
Chapter: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eldVPD7NMoBpOOUOXcLR-kz1967jS2o2gn5PFCLK81g/edit?usp=sharing
Recent Critiques: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16oir7u/comment/k1nirex/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/16q6aov/comment/k1xj3mg/?utm\_source=share&utm\_medium=web2x&context=3