Hi, This is the longest i've spent writing a poem and i'm overthinking it. I know its not quite right so any feedback on this would be much appreciated.

When i was 4 years younger

I held fire in my arms,

I heard a sweet siren,

My warning alarm.

Flame girl, Autumn eyes,

Soft hearts she never admired.

I was easy prey, Foolish to stay.

A stepping stone to the one she desired.

She was malevolent and benevolent My sea and sky.

4 years ago I was love-sick.

A victim of Lorelei.

She was my religion, I was devout.

Decieved by her warmth,

She froze me out.