[475] Where do old birds go to die -interpretation

Hey, this is a quick 1 page story. Would love any feedback.

Mainly wondering the last paragraph is too 'on the nose', or is the rest of the story not 'on the nose' enough (i.e you can't understand whatever the hell I just made you read)

Link to the story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AxpY8qxKlH7_8NfBffE7omfJyB7Y03nj06l_dwZofA0/edit?usp=sharing

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Payment:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/17pwvyl/comment/k91zp2s/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3

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