[2036] The Dreamer's Keep - Chapter 1

Hi there,
First time submitting to Destructive Readers. I've had a pretty rough go querying (and over-querying), but I think my letter is in dramatically better shape. However it's come to my attention that my prose and particularly my first chapter (mostly the first 2k) needs some work.
I've revised it, cutting down on extraneous details/descriptions and events and I'm trying to add a better hook. Let me know what you think, and if it still needs an extra punch to grab someone's initial attention. It's rough because a crucial aspect of the first chapter is establishing the mundanity of the protagonist's life, and it's hard to do that and be interesting.
Thanks for your time and I hope you like it. If you have suggestions I'm also all ears.

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