[225] Of Strange Matters

Hi folks-

This is a prologue to a sci fi MG novel I am working on.

I’m especially curious to know if y’all think this prologue sets the stage well, or if I should just nix it all together.

Is the prose too simple?

Any help is much appreciated. 🙏

Story:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/18K2jBLCKzyMd9fErEa3qV9ggM1kxLYzgC4JI1HT_Obg/edit

Crit:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/f6U6UUfCYW