[730] Hey, That's My Ball! -Children's Book-

I'm not a writer (this might be made abudantly clear once you start reading my submission) but I'm writing and illustrating a picture book aimed at young kids for my daughter when she gets a bit older.

Anyway, it's a simple story of our family dog stealing balls, and there are also sample draft illustrations that give an idea of how it'd look.

I'd like to know your initial impressions and whether the story is coherent and makes sense to you. I also welcome any suggestions on how I could make it more engaging and enjoyable to read.

I haven't spotted many young childrens story submissions here so I hope its okay to post it!

Here's a link to my story.

Here's a link to my critique [955].