[812] A Difficult Fantasy

Hi everyone!

I wrote this as an experiement. It's like a sort of chapter 1 to a story I haven't planned (so there is no chapter 2 in my mind). Basically I wanted to create a more realistic fantasy setting. I want for readers of classic medieval fantasy to read something more realistic, but still having some familiar elements.

All feedback is welcome, but especially if you usually read classic fantasy stories (Tolkien etc...) and/or play DnD.

Right now I am looking to improve overall and since my last story posted here had some plot related issues, what do you think of this plot?

Is the dialogue good or too bland?

Do I describe too much and should just have more dialogue without descriptions?

Is the twist cheesy or involuntarily funny?

Thank you in advance.

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