[2614] Snoop (Section 1)

Hello! Thanks in advance for critiques of Snoop (title is a bad placeholder, you don't get to critique that, lol.)

The story is intended to be the opening chapter for a fantasy novel. Or rather, the first 2/3rds of the opening chapter: I split it up to have digestible submissions. I'm open to any and all comments, though my biggest areas of interest are: *Are the characters introduced given enough depth to seem real, and distinct from each other? Especially the main character, does she come across as interesting enough to compel the reader to continue reading? *In general, does the pacing/prose hold up? The beginning also introduces the magic system, and I intended to strike a balance of only sharing the need-to-know, but enough that it's not confusing. *Any spots that just seems awkward to read.

Thanks again!

Crits:

[[2393] Royal Hearts] (https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1b14frd/2393_royal_hearts/kskkorf/)

[[2734] A Wellspring Tale] (https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1b1iw13/2734_a_wellspring_tale/ksg61xl/)