[1539] Born in Fog - Chapter 1

Hello! I have started writing an urban fantasy murder mystery novel with a romance subplot. I hope to go for a Peaky Blinder's esque vibe set in the modern day.

The premise is that after a murder rocks our main character Lily's life, she is thrown into the seedy underground of her small coastal town. She finds the city is run in the dark by three powerful families. Families of vampires. Will a measly human be able to solve her friends murder while keeping her head? Find out next time on dragon ball z!

I wrote that pretty quickly and could have done a much better job, but I think it gets the point across enough. Other than general edits and structure suggestions I have a few questions:

1. Does this work as an opening chapter? Are you interested throughout, or are there less interesting points?
2. Do I do a good job of introducing Jaimie before we discover she has been murdered?
3. Most importantly, would you keep reading?

I welcome all feedback. I want to improve. Don't hold back.

Here is my chapter.

Critique: [1674]

eta: I made this post, deleted it and resubmitted because I am good at reading comprehension.