[2393] Chapter Two -Winds of Change
Hello, this is the 2nd chapter of my current WIP.
Current genre: fantasy, urban/low fantasy
Context: Main character is a Risola (for all intents and purposes, a witch), and the Risolas are a global, well off and well-established private community. In this chapter, she and her sister are making their way to their dress fitting for the upcoming Cording ceremony (basically a coming-of-age/womanhood celebration).
A few questions I want answered: Are there any parts that took you out of the story? What were they and why? Are you vibing with my prose/my writing style? If not, why? What would you change? This section is very description heavy as it introduces the readers to the weather phenomena of the world, however are there any parts you think I’ve overwritten? What is your opinion on my show/tell ratio? Can you point out some lines that stuck out to you (preferably negatively)?
Any fantasy words you don’t know the meaning of/any concepts you’d like to understand, please leave that in your reply. I’ll edit this post and leave it in the context section above.
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Posted Mar 20, 2024, 10:19 PM UTC