[1978] Homunculus

Hey, this is the first chapter of my thriller/mystery/action novel, and I would want to get some comments about my prose (as a lot of people said I need improvement in that area) but I would like most of it to be unrelated to prose as I don't get many comments about things unrelated to prose (Generally I would very much appreciate anything, but these are the things I want to focus on if possible)

A trigger warning for gore (and all related things such as murder etc)

Link to story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/11A7JbeJyEgFTWj8dVgAIqKcA1z3tHmiwoPx2vugY7fk/edit?usp=drivesdk

Criticism[2239] (I hope it's not lacking): https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/Daoi7wxgk3

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