[1480] Valistry - Chapter 3 (Part I)

Previous parts for context if needed: Chapter 1, Chapter 2

Same requests as the previous parts of VALISTRY. Am I maintaining readability? Do I cut down superfluous detail? Is the prose smooth? Is there enough introspection/interiority? Do I slow down and focus on making a good scene rather than try uniqueness (and fail)? As always, I welcome other notes.

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