[1612] For the Damaged

The opening pages for a story I'm writing (this is part of a bigger work, so it's not a full story). I know a couple of sentences are confusing, and they're meant to be, but I can't tell if it makes sense at all. Thanks <3

(This is the first draft too, btw)

Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bRZYN09F_oKMee-21X9AcRirtci_sjXJJsm_fE0gvMw/edit

Critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1d3gl20/2299_fubar/