[887] Train to Hashimoto

This is a short story with a single sci-fi element that is never really explained but thoroughly hinted at, written while I sat on a train to (you guessed it) Hashimoto. I tried to go for a style that is very different from what I've previously written and am looking forward to seeing if any of it works.

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Critique [2790]

I hope the critique is deemed to be high enough effort. Although I did give it my all, it's also the first time I've tried critiquing anything in this manner.