[1040] Touch Grass (title pending)

Hello people.

I wrote this slice of life, soft story on phone addiction. It has little stakes and I meant it to be mellow but also a fun/good read.

Useful feedback:

1. Please suggest me a title
2. Whether or not the text is interesting enough to read and whether it will keep the readers hooked long enough. (is the beginning good enough to hook the readers?
3. Which parts don't make sense or need polishing.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1DI0FztFj9P3JEeFou7fBph7z31-ZjN5NSyXWiTsIT0o/edit?usp=drivesdk

Critics:

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/T4EJZ34CEk

(notes for mods: I am not exactly sure how this works. I've made three critics so far and put one story up for critic. I'm putting up this critic since it matches my word limit and doesn't have a story of my own against it-- or should I post all the critics?)