[1711] Incompetent Ellie

Hey everyone. I am new to this Sub and I have been working on the piece for a bit and was hoping for some feedback. Incompetent Ellie is supposed to be a story about grief, self-worth, childhood trauma and growth along with a lot of similar and related themes. It is not supposed about excessively violent childhood trauma but rather the more subtle one that I think more people go through. The text is quite introspective. Regardless feel free to comment on anything that you feel is wrong. This is the first scene of the book and I would love to know whether you find my work engaging and whether you feel it is a good opening on the themes I have discussed. Thank you to everyone in advance.

TW: Death, Childhood Trauma (Nothing physical or overtly graphic, veered towards excessively strict parenting and emotional manipulation from that)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NyePtdUmH6wEPQh2MJ1o5JaKxDaoc4qwjFH0LyB1Azw/edit?usp=sharing

My Critiques
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