[1104] Recalibration (Complete short)

I think I found a style I like writing in, trying to develop a bit more of a voice in it with these shorter stories, although the whole concept is still a bit illusive to me.

Does it hold your interest? Is it thought provoking, straight forward? Perhaps a bit pretentious? Does the 'voice' feel distinct at all, or still mostly generic and invisible?

I don't know, just fuck me up or something.

For those who don't want to leave a full critique, some general thoughts are also appreciated (if that sorta thing is allowed on this sub?)

Here's the story

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