[1544] Ouroboros, part 1

Hi all, Pretty sure this is chapter 21 of the novel I'm working on. I know them by name more than by number. It's not the opening chapter, though. So, there are no character introductions, everyone has been introduced by now.

My work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1JwUWVKV9NryUhpMJIqpPFFjrc3uv_S8Zcdkacsyzm7A/edit?usp=sharing

All feedback is good feedback. Harsh critiques don't upset me. I know it needs work.

Thanks in advance.

Critique: https://old.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/1f9d519/1569_the_stranded_ones_first_5_pages/llrdgs6/