[1984] Cathedral

Hello! This is the first scene of a story I've been working on recently. I would love to know what you think, any advice or feedback is greatly welcomed! Thank you in advance!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LZfktw9RkRPDqRXbMtUtG4T97ZyZyccrpecSga7uIdc/edit?usp=sharing

Critique: [2064]