[1621] The Necromancer's Daughter

Hi all! I was one of the Halloween contest judges so it’s only fair that it's my turn to be judged.

I posted a very early version of this piece a year or so ago, but I’m hoping it’s less of a character sketch this time round and more fleshed out with setting and some sort of storyline. It’s the beginning of a YA fantasy and I tend to write quite tightly in first draft so I know there will be areas requiring expansion.

Anything you can see – micro, macro, worldbuilding, pacing, readability, missed opportunities to ramp things up, things I need to include etc.

Here it is - The Necromancer's Daughter

I’m particularly interested in how engaging it is – things you like about it, and if you would want to read on. If this is the case then I might just write the rest of it and not leave it as a vague outline.

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