[1242] The Nameless Island

Hello all,

This is the prologue, or at least what I planned to be the prologue, of a novel-length story I'm working on. I'm still on my first draft at time of writing, but I've come to think that the flashback part of the prologue might be better off separated from the rest of it as the prologue while relegating the present time parts to Chapter 1. I wrote the flashback with the purpose of setting the tone and atmosphere of the story, but I feel like I might be able to start the story with a slightly better hook if I separate it. I'd like to hear your opinions on it, as well as for its writing quality in general.

Genre: Fantasy, Coming of Age

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_XPsOBn9FPsgLZ2JxiTb3qKEpLk_JdEzsRPWnU7lw1o/edit?usp=drivesdk

Critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/ahaVkogSO0