[317] On Corentyn

i'm trying my hand at writing in a TTRPG "flavor text" kind of style. this is linked to the Pathfinder universe, but i've kept it pretty generic. the main aim is to be totally timeless and faceless; to describe a process rather than a singular event.

i find it terribly difficult to critique my own work. i never feel like my opinions on it are well-formed, one way or another. please let me know what you think!

here's my critique

and here's my (writing)[https://pastebin.com/01siAB84]

thanks a ton!