[743] How to Play Kings Corner

hi! this is my first post here.

this is a short story/poem (?)

I'm mostly posting this piece because I have no idea how to feel about it and I want to make it better. this type of writing is very out of my comfort zone--i usually only write novels and more traditional short stories.

i would like mostly general thoughts and feedback. anything that comes to mind while you're reading would be appreciated.

i'd also like advice on how i could make it more compelling while keeping it subtle.

also, small TW: there's a couple mentions of eating disorders and general discussions around mental health, but it's very mild.

link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/16z3cnuU27NQD84mu4qDwlwD0g2X8rakS-tR0WFKeJkU/edit?usp=sharing

critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/fvdBWCVq12