[1560] The House In The Woods

first chapter of my first short story (unless we're counting shitty 4 page nonsensical ideas i wrote when I was 12), just looking for overall criticism about how i can improve

https://docs.google.com/document/d/15qD6MNvhNb9ktATu7r7Byf1XmPVITDRNQ-1HOBR8d3I/edit?usp=drivesdk

My critiques

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/po0xc1IaIC

https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/NP1CsIn788