[1634] My girlfriend got turned into a goldfish

I'm writing a novel and just finished the first chapter so wanted some thoughts/critiques that I could keep in mind as I continue writing the rest of it. Please be brutally honest, I promise I can take it! Prose, plot, humor (is it too cringey?), settings, characters, please let me know what you think of everything and anything :)

Writing: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1z1fQ4KmGy0XaeolMoVEt4ZwxHCsRnIfvgqODgSCiIM8/edit?usp=sharing

Critiques:

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