Thoughts on my poetry? (please be constructive)

I recently started starting feeling comfortable sharing my writing I wasn't offered much feedback with the person I shared it with other than a simple "wow". What are your thoughts anything you'd recommend I change?

A love letter to the butch with neatly parted brown hair and eyes the shadowed blue color of a thunderstorm before it breaks-dark, lashed, charged impossible to look away from. Her strength isn't flexed, there's something in her build that suggests it's embedded- steel under silk. She spoke in low commands and slow winks, she knew what it did to you. There was something cinematic about her- as if Clark Kent traded the phone booth for a locked bedroom door and said, "don't move" right before undoing her tie. You're not a cry for help —you're a mission she's choosing. You don't feel rescued. You feel saved.