[743] (resubmitting) How to Play Kings Corner

hi again! i'm resubmitting this story (critique is different than last time though) for more critique, so if you have already commented on it before, please don't again. i'm reposting this story because i'm thinking about submitting to some young writers contests and i'm not sure if it's quite good enough.

i've made some edits based on the last post and I would like to know any thoughts you have about it.

any and all feedback is greatly appreciated!

link to story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/16z3cnuU27NQD84mu4qDwlwD0g2X8rakS-tR0WFKeJkU/edit?usp=drivesdk

critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/0cB2NxLTmu