[1459] Opening chapter of my horse story One Flame

I'm probably going to change the title (One Flame) later, it's not the best. In any case, this is the opening chapter of my book. It's a (furry?) fantasy novel centered around a society of horses whose social status is determined by their performance under saddle. There is a fair amount of horse jargon as it is intended for an equestrian audience-let me know if it's weird or needs translating. I do have more chapters finished but can't post them here without more critiques in the bank-let me know if you're interested in beta reading for fun. I'm mostly just trying to see if this is an entertaining read. I don't plan on pursuing publishing unless some soul on this Reddit gives me a sign that it's worth that much. I understand it's geared toward a very specific audience, so I'm interested to see how it fares with general readers.

My Submission (Doc)

Critique: [1918]