[1080]Dunno

Opener to a literary fic ill probably not finish. Sometimes I go back to it for writing practice for my other works, but I'd like to know what people have to say. Especially things like the voice of my narrator, if I've made any grammar goofballs, and how on earth to format it better.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tk55DzHTD-zlhzHq1h-br6DWXH0WGYzMfFc1hs8fhRg/mobilebasic

Crits: [1645] [500 but mods took it down. Sorry I'm new to the reddit, getting used to the system]